I read the three essays: "Dissection", "Letting Go" and "Hanging with Horses." I love the way Miss. Ringler writes. I love the description that she uses to explain objects. But then she doesn't use too many details so that it's a bombardment of textures, colors and shapes. "Dissection" was a great example of the description usage. "On the way to radiology, the breeze in the hallway blew through my hospital gown and the thin blanket covering me as I lay on a stretcher, the pain and noise in my head constant. Two male technicians wheeled me into a cold operating room where everything was stainless steel. They moved trays of utensils onto tables laid with white sheets. The table was hard, lights bright." I easily saw/ pictured this paragraph in my head. It is descriptive even on the edge of vague. But like I said before, I could picture this paragraph when I was reading it perfectly. I could picture this because the descriptions were descriptions of a simple hospital room which everyone knows. She doesn't over detail the room using words like polar (cold). This essay also relates to her real life. In Miss. Ringler's biography it said how Miss. Ringler graduated from medical school and became a nurse. "She graduated from Duke University's School of Nursing in 1979 and worked as a medical/surgical and cardiac nurse at the George Washington University Hospital." Miss. Ringler's personal experience in the medical field is portrayed in this piece. Miss. Ringler's use of medical terms in this piece shows that she knows what she is talking about. "...arteriogram...neuroradiologist...Vertebral artery dissection..." I think that over all Miss. Ringler's experience in the Medical department made her essay more medically descriptive. The second piece that I read was "Letting Go". This is a great story. I thought it was written beautifully. There was nothing that I liked particularly because I loved it so much. There were specific parts that I liked a lot though. One of the parts that I liked the best was the ending. "More than twenty years later, tears still well up when I remember Gloria’s dignity, poise, beauty, and grace. Sharing the intimate and intense process of her death created a bond between us as strong as a relationship cultivated over decades. That day in 1981, I not only lost a patient, but also, a beloved friend." I liked this part a lot because you can tell that Miss. Ringler really cared about Mrs. Gloria and that she wasn't just another patient in the eyes of Miss. Ringler. The second part that I like was the beginning. "Erect in a lavender suit, carrying a small tapestried valise, she was all elegance and poise. Long slender legs advanced with the tapping of heels against linoleum. Able to glimpse only the back of her, I thought for a moment she might be famous—a model, an actress. I watched as she strode down the long hallway, dark wavy hair coursing over her shoulders.... A tumor, large enough to fit in the open grasp of a hand, formed of red granulation tissue--like the inside of someone’s mouth—protruded from her right cheek." I like this part because yes it portrays sadness but something else. I liked how in the beginning paragraph (Above) Miss. Ringler explained how beautiful Gloria was: long legs, small, wavy hair, a model. Then when they get into the room and Gloria turns her face the tumor makes her not pretty. But even though there was this ugly tumor on her face she was still a beautiful person without it. This essay again like the one I explained above relates to Miss. Ringler's medical experiences. This essay is made better because I usually read stories in the perspective of the patient but in this case it is in the perspective of the nurse. So I think this essay was made better because it was told in a experienced nurse's point of view. It shows you that people can become friends under the saddest circumstances. The last essay I read "Hanging with Horses" was great. Yes it was a little inappropriate but like Miss. Geurin said on blackboard..."Hanging with Horses she notes is a little risque, but she thinks it teaches us to use humor in our writing when crazy things happen to us that we don't expect!" My favorite part of this essay was Lily's reaction to this whole situation. ". I looked for Lily to help. But, when she saw me dangling by my bra, she took a step back and scanned the ring to see if anybody was watching. No one was there. ‘Mom…stop it, get off the horse.’" I liked this because I couldn't believe this. I couldn't believe Lily's reaction because her mom could have died. Dan could have gotten frightened and ran away then trampled Miss. Ringler. I think that this writing piece is better because Miss Ringler knows about nature. In her biography Miss. Ringler said how she could be brush hogging and that she lives on thirty acres of land. "…30 acres of land… When Robyn is not at the bookshop, you might find her brushhogging the fields at home." Although this essay doesn't exactly relate to nature, I still think the fact that she lives on a lot of land and that she brush hogs is important. It shows me that she isn't afraid of nature and that she at least likes to be outside. This connects to the essay because she found this situation at the barn funny rather than a nature hater would probably not have even gotten on the horse. All three of these essays prove that writing an essay that relates to your everyday life can make your essay even better!
Question #1= In the essay "Dissection" what did you mean at the end when you said there was a part of you missing?
Question #2= In "Dissection" did you ever/ have you ever recovered from your illness?
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3.9, I thought that our last speaker was ok. I loved how he taught us to be
creative with writing haiku’s and how he taught us on the process of making haiku's!
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